Eimear

Thanks for the comments guys, I literally wrote this in about ten minutes late one night so I'm going to do a serious re-draft and take my time with it. ...

Thanks guys for the comments. I'm having a serious case of hindsight were i see exactly what your saying- i think im going to axe the rhyming scheme, for sure! ...

Unexpected and poignant. I said it once my good friend, and I'll say it again. Poetry at it's best.

Cool- more like a story than a poem, but all the better for it. Havent got many issues with this, just a good job. Eimearxx

Emotions on a page? Sorry, I couldnt really get into this. I would suggest not having such a detailed first paragraph, then my mind won't wander. Hope that helps Eimear

Whoops, thanks Kyte.

Space out the lines, and then I promise you i'll give a detailed critque. Its almost midnight and I'm supposed to be writing my novel....jeese i've got school tommorrow as ...

I'll second that- Nothing is 'allowed' to be an info dump in your story. That term is used as a negative criticism. Cut the prologue, and give us the first ...

Hey, I enjoyed reading this, the piece developed well and I liked the issues that were raised. But I'm confused. Is this in the right place in terms of forums? ...

Hey, thanks for all the fab critques, they were all really helpfull and I'm in the process of re-drafting this piece. Thanks very much! Eimearxx

I went to see it in the cinema on Boxing Day....all I can say is without giving away to much- look behind you for the love of Sam!

Go Wuthering Heights! Woop, woop! I'm doing that legend of a book for my English coursework, It's amazing! The entire thing is brilliantly plotted out and well written...and what about ...

No problem, I enjoyed reviewing your work because its clear you've got real talent. The errors etc are very small in comparison, so well done. Could you possibly PM me ...

Lol, You have a great, seemingly untapped talent That means that your talent is never ending,...I just said it in an awkward way. So well done! Woop! Eimearxx

Hey guys, thanks soooo for taking the time to read this and write reviews. I'm really grateful for all your help and critque, especially as this is my first draft. ...