Duskglimmer

I have to say, that at first I was prepared to not like this poem, the opening lines just set me off somehow against this. But the more I read, ...

I absolutely love this stanza: night has fully broken now releasing a scattering of stars spilling a silk ink that dyes the sky a haunting purple i lie beneath it, ...

Unfortunetly, I have to agree with Chanson. I think you over used the descriptions. As you read the poem it took too much time to try and figure out what ...

I loved it. I hate posting on someone's work and not being able to give SOMETHING that I thought could have been improved, but I just loved this so much. ...

No... I'm still working on that one, Bobo... I'm talking about the Group Story board that never got started. And yeah, the YWG doesn't have hardly any serious writers on ...

Wow. Just... wow. I love the idea of this. I love the thoughts behind this. I can't tell you the number of times lately that I've been thinking things along ...

I liked this for the most part. I think you could have made it a little more powerful by replacing the cuss words with more descriptive words, but that's just ...

I liked the first stanza. I think it read well and made a good opening, but it didn't flow very well into next stanza and from then on out, things ...

Well... I'm in a word: lost. There's not enough here for me to form any sort of mental picture of the images that your describing. As soon as I find ...

Unfortunetly, I have to agree with the other two. This was hard to read, and didn't make all that much sense. It sounded nice, but when I actually tried to ...

This started out really great. I love the first few stanzas. They made me smile. But I think that you carried it a bit too far and dragged it out ...

This seems a little too simplistic and repetative. I don't really get where you're coming from, or why you're writing this from the poem. It just sounds like you felt ...

This really sounds like something that you would just open your window and scream at someone. It really sounds like the framework of a poem, rather than an actual finished ...

I'm not sure what was going on in the poem. It looks like you tried to take several different topics and cram them together into one poem and there doesn't ...

I really liked this in the beginning, but the repetition got a little old by the end. But for the most part I really liked this. I partticularly liked this ...