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Wow... I'm not sure I entirely got this, but it feels like a fantastic opening to something. I don't know if you plan on adding on to this or not, ...

I enjoyed it. But it was just a little lacking. It never really made me feel what the person was saying, never made me want to feel what she was ...

I know it's nothing new to say, but I'm confused. I like the color contrasts. And I keep thinking that there's something in this and it's just not clicking, so ...

For me, it was a little hard to read. I think more people would probably read it if you broke it up a little and made smaller chunks to help ...

Unfortunately, I have to agree with everyone else. it seemed a little lacking. But I really enjoyed the image in these lines: My bandages Pages of angry writing Stacked as ...

Chanson, I just have to say, that the way you always seem to capture me within the first five words of your stories, is abosolutely fantastic. You have a fabulous ...

I love these books!!! I've read: Dark elf trilogy: Homeland, Exile, and Sojurn Icewind dale trilogy: Crystal Shard, Streams of Silver, and The Halfling's Gem Legacy of the drow quartet: ...

Wow... sort of hard to make comments on this one after that last line... lol I liked the idea of this one. But it seemed a little choppy and I ...

I think this was a cool idea. Threading the story of the high beams through the whole thing could have worked really well. But I don't feel like you used ...

This is really incredibly powerful. I'm beginning to really look forward to these pieces that you keep writing. Every time you do the situation just jumps off the page at ...

I liked this for the most part. was really enjoying the rythm you had going in the first two stanzas, but the last line felt rather sharp and jarring. I'm ...

I think the story of this could be good, but the dialouge is extremely unrealistic. I don't know a single guy in the world that talks like this, let alone ...

This is fantastic. I can't tell you just how much this rings true. You did such a great job of capturing the emotions involved. I think that the only suggestion ...

This seemed a little disjoint to me, like you were just brainstorming different ideas and throwing them together. I think if you concentrated on just one type of hero this ...

The repetition in this really didn't work for me. I got bored of reading the same line over and over. I think you have a good idea here, but the ...