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  • Poetry » Fanfiction, Supernatural Re: I close my eyes.

    Hey there! Very eventful story you got here, my dear. Mostly though, such stories do better in prose format, leaving poetry for things where you explore the more intricate, detailed ...

    Jun 13, 2015
  • Article / Essay » Health, Other Re: Freewrite #1

    Hey there! I love how you're trying to raise awareness over a fatal disease. Your aim is wonderful. The way you approached the idea though, my dear, wasn't as amazing ...

    Jun 13, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Life By The Thousand

    Hey there fortis! Here for your Exchange Club review. Firstly, I really like this poem. I like the concept and the way you got that through. I love the first ...

    Aug 23, 2014
  • Other » General, General Re: Introduce to Stuart Pritchard

    Interestingly put, but I think it would be more engaging for the reader if you maybe used these “----:-----“ in between text that are 1st person narrated. Maybe start each ...

    Jun 4, 2014
  • Poetry » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Billy Goats Gruff: Troll Hunters

    Hello there, Duke here for a short review today. Overall, it's a nicely written piece for children and since I can't imagine writing for children I assume it was probably ...

    Mar 9, 2014
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Old Mother Hubbard

    I really liked this piece, but I also think you really went off the poem's content though. (I had assumed you'd refer to the dog sometime.) But if you were ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Search For Tony Chapter 5

    Hello dear, so I'm just randomly reviewing your chapter 5 of this novel because it seems that somehow this piece of yours is the only one that hasn't received the ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Article / Essay » Culture, Realistic Re: Working from the Earth: Exploring Greek Identity

    Hey there ^_^ So starting off on your piece, I'll say that it is, as expected, well written. I found the information and your take on them very interesting. Secondly, ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The last words

    Hey there :D So starting off, I can see you need to add in some more punctuation. One wise person here once told me to try writing my poem, thinking ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Something

    Hello there ^_^ So for your piece here, I'll first say that I like the overall structure and flow. The punctuation is great, except maybe here: I say sorry way ...

    Dec 29, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Spiritual Re: Irrational Rationality

    Hello there ^_^ Starting off, your whole first paragraph is just two sentences! Maybe you should really shorten the first one, split it or something. Maybe replace the comma after ...

    Dec 22, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Thoughts of Freedom

    Hello there :D So firstly, I think you should be more natural in your poetry but of course it depends on what you're writing about. For if mine is chosen, ...

    Dec 22, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Past

    Hello Nikko ^_^ So here's some tiny changes I'd do in the first para: If life had a restart button, I would surely press it ; so that I can ...

    Dec 22, 2013
  • Poetry » Humor, Horror Re: Roses and Chocolate

    Hello there ^_^ So starting off, your first letter needs to be capitalized and then you should put comas and semicolons at the end of each line (possibly) - do ...

    Dec 21, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Ghost Dancing

    Hey there, again :D The first paragraph is great. The second needs some tiny twitches. I feel like you're here , though deep down I know you're not - but ...

    Dec 21, 2013


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