Dreamworx95

And the heart of their focus is an angel, rare and radiant, illumed to beauty with light from within. Illuminated. Wow, this was pretty poetic. Beautifully written, but I think ...

Well, it certainly took you long enough. Hmph. Gabrielle was staying with us. Those two were stuck to each other like Siamese twins. First I want to say that you ...

Milo loved animals, and figured it would be great fun to help feed and clean them every day. I'd remove the comma after animals. slanted steeply in random places, as ...

Hello again, Master. :lol: Bookcases were divided into orderly sections, and were laid out evenly across the library's floor. Take out the comma after "sections". I also don't think "library" ...

Good evening, Master. ;) I thought the beginning paragraph was a very good start. The truth was that Miana, longed for adventure, Take out the comma after Miana. ... climbed ...

A thousand apologies for not getting to this sooner, my dear friend. I've been working super hard on re-writing my prologue so I haven't had a chance to review anything. ...

I'm not used to reading things in the second person, so this is a little different for me. I think you pulled it off very well. Writing was flawless. No ...

Hey, Cleverboy. Glad to be back with this story again. Lanterns hung from shop windows giving the night an almost romantic gleam. This sentence doesn't sound right to me. I ...

Wow, clever-boy, this was really good! It was really easy to get through and also very enjoyable. I'm kind of wondering who this Mintrow character is. He sort of just ...

Hello, Ofir, I'm Worx, and I shall be your reviewer for the day, my liege. ;) The first thing I noticed was the giant block of text in the middle ...

Hey, Meadow! It's Worx! I got tired of being called Dream so I changed my nick-name to Worx. First thing I want to say is it's probably not wise to ...

Hey, Hippie, it's Dream again. I'll be your reviewer for the day. Caution: I'm about to tear this thing to shreds. You have been warned. First thing's first. All the ...

Hey, Meadow! I'm happy to see you've finally found that long-lost inspiration. Pedro was still pacing behind the couch, rubbing his hair. “ Everything Gabrielle? Everything ?” I believe you ...

Hey, Broadway, I'll be your reviewer today. Alright, so I thought this lacked a bit of detail...actually, I thought it lacked a LOT of detail. I read through the whole ...

Yo, yo, yo, diggy-dog!!! How's it hangin' yo? Glad to see you're moving forward with this, Meadow. You should keep going. I also think you should have continued with the ...