Diana2357

Cute poem bibi; I liked the rhyme scheme. Although I feel you may have left out a few words in some lines, it is orginal and funny. For example, in ...

Lisy, I understand your message in your poem yet its difficult to follow because it has many fragment and awkward sentences. Also, it seems incomplete, I would of added one ...

Miss Tasha, this was a very cute poem. I liked your rhyme scheme; perhaps I would work a bit on the syllabic counting to make it sound better since you ...

Rogerlddf, this is a nice poem; I liked how you ended it with title but in a different meaning of hope. There were few grammar mistakes and spelling errors (appreciate, ...

Daniel, I like how you expressed your emotions about school. Good use of repetition "it's that", yet this seemed like one big run-on and many times it was dificult to ...

Arturo, this is quite nice. In the first stanza, you start rhyming (thunder / wonder), but then it stopped. I would of tried to continue the rhyme scheme. Also, I ...

Jpball, this is short but sweet. I like your message about family first, perhaps you could of extended this a bit more on giving more details about your personal experiences ...

DSAKnantye, I would categorize this differently because it's too short for a "short story". Also, your writing mentions one generous lady, therefore, I would change your title to "person" or ...