Demeter

Oooh. I read it out loud ;) and it started to sound like some kind of spell. You know, "Bottle, bottle, speak your words..." etcetera. But that was sort of ...

Aw, gee, everyone has already said everything that should be said. I can't never do anything! ;) I'm, of course, agreeing with the article of yours, or maybe I should ...

Seriously, what obsession does everyone have about posting poems about fear? :) You did that, JustMe did that, I did that (though it's in the Dramatic Poetry section)... But let's ...

Wow, this made me want to write sonnets! Great vocabulary you've got there! And rhyming worked, too. It's true about that Yoda thing... :) i had to laugh when I ...

I really liked it!! :) And it's great that there's the "tear" dilemma that oneeyedunicornhunter tried to solve. It gives us something to think about. I liked the first and ...

Haha, I find it rather diffficult to review this, because yesterday I posted a poem with exactly same title and subject. The contents and the way it's written are different, ...

Hey. I liked this! My favourite is maybe the third stanza, because it rhymes so well and the dilemma between "peaces" - "pieces" is kind of genius. Haha. :) The ...

I think it should have been a bit longer - it stops abrubtly. "Her body was broken and she laid on the floor broken..." - doesn't sound that good since ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! :) Very nice job here. Have you read/written much poetry? If you have, post it here - I'd like to read more! The rhyming works, it's ...

The title was the thing that got me here, but this was over before I even noticed. And unfortunately that's not a good thing. I actually liked it at first, ...

This is a good example of the "show, don't tell" factor. It's hard to break, I know, but I think some other people would say it, too. I kind of ...

I was amazed when I had read two stanzas and was going down for more. But then it just stopped. So I suggest you write at least one more stanza ...

Okay... here's the review I promised. :) Wow! This seemed more mature than your other poems that I've read, so that's a very good thing. The rhyming worked well except ...

You really have to check your grammar, there were disturbing mistakes all around this poem. Like "in him I am scared" - you just can't say like that! Capitalize the ...

I was going to review an other poem when I saw your title and thought, "I have to go read that one!!" I liked this. Especially the line "I hate ...