Demeter

Hmm... I really don't read this kind of poetry, so I don't know what to expect. I found your lining a little weird, like in this: "I had forsaken innocence, ...

Aww... That was really beautiful. I'm sure the girl you wrote this for (if there is one) is all flattered now :) "Be my sunshine For you already are My ...

E, are you stressing about school? :D Since you wrote "Exam Blues" as well! Oh well. Forget about that. You have this certain writing style that makes it really hard ...

I got a little confused as there was good rhyming in the last stanza and in the other ones not really anything. I feel the same way about the third ...

You know what? I actually kind of agree with you, sometimes ;) This has nice rhyming, by the way, though it wasn't very much of a poem in that way. ...

Hey gangsta, wassup? :'D That was so gangsta! Okay, now you made me say that all the time, you freakin' gangsta. Okay, I'll stop. Now. You know why? 'Cuz I'm ...

Hmm... It's actually kind of sweet. I somehow liked this. :) But there are a couple of things. First, you must capitalize your "i"s in parts like "am i too ...

I think it's a nice try... The flow didn't really exist, though. But the title is nice, I liked that. I kind of agree with all the people here. You ...

A subject right from the boring life! Haha. Footsteps and temples pounding, clocks ticking time away. This didn't really sound very good, it would be better if you put that ...

I don't understand the "I wasn't, and I didn't" part in the second paragraph. I believe this is a true story, but I don't really see the point. Well, at ...

Nice topic :) There were a few things I'd like to point out, though (I can't let any story alone without ripping it to pieces :)) First of all, I ...

Well, first of all, it was kind of... short. And I'm sure that almost everyone has heard this story before. Well, of course not this very story, but you know. ...

Hey, E. This is the first short story that I've read here (I guess) and I liked it! I like stories in where the narrator is "I", if you know ...

I think this was the first story I've started to read here. And overall I liked it, though there were a few confusing parts (but Periwinkle seems to have pointed ...

You know, Lilith, I don't think this was a bad poem at all! I hope you could keep writing poems, and what I love most about this is the fact ...