Demeter

Hey there, Soulkana! So cool - I wonder what the puzzle is! Overall, you use a nice balance of shorter and longer sentences, which makes the text run smoothly and ...

Hi, Sarah! Welcome to YWS again! :) The title of this caught my eye and was why I wanted to take a closer look. Even if it might be fairly ...

Hi Sarah! So, I picked this piece to read, because the title was interesting and caught my eye! However, the piece left me quite confused. The title is called "The ...

Hi Toe! Cool, rhyming poetry! I was very interested to see a "horror" poem, and since it has rhymes, it reminds me a bit of Edgar Allan Poe, whom I ...

Hi, Smile! I'm sure that a lot of us can relate to this and recall similar experiences from our own lives. But how to make the reader go from "yeah, ...

Hi SwallowedSun! Welcome to YWS! :D I'll do a couple of specific comments first and then give you my overall impression! For now however, Paolo just stood up and let ...

Hi PollarBear! Is this something that the story itself would begin with, or is this something that's meant to help you to get to the mood and then start the ...

Daughter! ^_^ Long time no see! It's also been ages since I've read any sort of poetry, but I'll try to at least scratch the surface. The overall impression is ...

Nevanoel! Here I am like I said I would be. :D I've only skimmed the other comments you have - and wow, there's a lot! - so I'm sorry if ...

Hey WriterChick! The first paragraph of a short story is like the back cover of a novel: you use it to determine whether you want to keep reading or pick ...

Tjena Saga! All in all, I thought this had a cool and slightly spooky atmosphere which I like a lot. Your rhymes are mostly very meticulous, which is very good, ...

Hi Murmurations and welcome to YWS! This was pretty interesting! I like these kind of poems and stories where the ending is "shocking" and/or unexpected. I also like rhyming poems, ...

Lemon! :D I thought this was simply adorable. The first "Mew." just about broke my heart. I'm such a sucker for kittens - apparently it works even without seeing them. ...

D: It's so sad... *sniffles* But I'm so glad that you posted something! I enjoyed reading this and I also realised that I really like you writing in first person ...

Hey, ohsorocknroll! I'm not sure if I've ever read/reviewed anything by you and let me just say... woah. I mean, really. This was really good, in my opinion. I don't ...