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Re: Bodies of Roses
Hey there, Romania! There is almost nothing wrong with this poem, except for the second-to-last line, "But it death smelled of roses and not of rot," where the word "it" ...
Aug 7, 2014 -
Re: Revel And Dance (Dedicated to Bad Role Models)
Hey there, wtppowers! First of all, wow. This poem is AMAZING. I have nothing bad to say about this, so here are some of my favorite lines (even though I ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Lighthouse
Hey there, CollinWitte! I really like your idea with an acrostic poem because I haven't been able to find any of those on here, although I may just not be ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Numb
Hey there, jls1638! This a pretty good poem, and I feel as if I can relate to it a lot, especially on some of those really bad days. I like ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: The story of a 6-year-old.
Hey there, Kanome (and your little sister)! For a six-year-old, this is actually pretty good. I laughed some and overall this is great. There are some spelling mistakes, but that's ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Dear Complacent Authority Figures
Hey there, MasterGrieves! There isn't really much to say about this poem. It was pretty good, although it seemed sort of like a rant, which isn't necessarily a bad thing. ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Stones
Hey there, Hadj! I'm going to go right to what each stanza means. Stanza 1: In this stanza you compare us to forgotten stones that had been tossed into the ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Bad guys for Heat Fighter~ Vane
Hey there, Pinkiegirl13! I have a couple things that I would fix/add. First of all, for Vane's appearance, I think that you could add a little more detail to what ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: My character: Nani Long
Hey there, Pinkiegirl13 (by the way, I like that name)! I'm pretty sure that anyone could see that Nani is one of the "bad kids", especially considering the fact that ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Dreams Shattering
Hey there, moneypowerglory! First of all, this is really short, but in a good way. I honestly don't know how you would make this into something really long, like a ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: STOP (a checklist)
Hey there, EmeraldEyes! There is only one way to describe this poem, Amazing with a capital a. I feel as if I can really relate to this poem, especially if ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Reasons
Hello there, ConfusedGlasses! First of all, I really like your name. It's pretty cool. Second of all, I absolutely love this poem, especially since I like free-verse poems a bit ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Old Joke, New Approach.
Hey there! This is a really great poem! This poem is really well written. These are my favorite stanzas in here, "There is a man who speaks in metaphors, And ...
Jul 27, 2014 -
Re: Dear Moon
Hello there, Sarahjo! This poem is really good. Also, I don't think this poem is too simple. If anything, I think it has a lot of detail, although that may ...
Jul 20, 2014 -
Re: Never at Peace
This is really good. I love how you start each stanza (I think that's the right word) with "we are never at peace". Although I would suggest that you start ...
Jul 19, 2014
