Stones

Hey there, Hadj! I'm going to go right to what each stanza means.

Stanza 1: In this stanza you compare us to forgotten stones that had been tossed into the water. To me, this means that we are all eventually cast aside and forgotten by people we care about/know.

Stanza 2: Here, you say that we are the souls that are put in the dark, away from everyone. Correct me if I'm wrong, but here you are saying that people are pushed into the shadows by those around them so that they aren't noticed by anyone.

Stanza 3: In the third stanza, you say that we are bricks, weak alone, but together we are powerful (pretty self explanatory).

Stanza 4: This stanza is also pretty self explanatory. You are saying that we have hope, even though we are hopeless, and that we are right, even when we are wrong.

This is a really great poem. I give it five out of five.

Hasta la vista,
DeltaEcho

Hey, Zhia here to rewiew (dissect) your poem, Stones!

First off, I agree with wtppowers in the idea that it's' simple at first, but as you reread it over and over, you begin to comprehend and understand the true meaning. I also like the fact that the poem has that 'hopeless' feel to it in the beginning, but then it grows more positive from stanza 2 and on. Now to the dissection, shall we?

In stanza 1, correct me if I'm wrong, but maybe river would sound better? *checks to see* It's your choice overall, and there are upsides and downsides to using 'river' I guess it depends on wether (always had trouble with that word) you want to be specific or not.

In the second stanza, it brings the feel that you are being left alone into view. I am also sure that punctuation is not supposed to be in this poem? I'm sure it isn't, but just checking. I have no other comments about this stanza other than wow.

The third stanza... This is where it starts to get more positive! It reminds me of something, but I don't know what... It also tells that we are weak alone (basically telling those big headed idiots to shut up XD) but together we are strong. (TEAMWORK FTW!! Go team AQUA!)

The fourth stanza wraps it all up in a big bundle. It reminds us that even at our lowest point to still have hope. That even when we make mistakes, something positive will come out of it. Experience.

Am I dissecting a bit too much? Nah. At least I don't think so. Anyway, thanks for a good read!

Signing out,

Zhia

Hello, Hadj! It's Mr. Powers here, with another fun and exciting review here! I'm going to look at your poem, "Stones".

This is a pretty simple poem at first glance, but it only grows in sentiment as you re-read it. You're making a statement about people in general. Let's look at each individual stanza, and try to discover what you're saying.

In stanza 1, you compare people to skipping stones that sink to the bottom of a body of water. Here, you could be saying that "we" are alone.

Next, you compare "we" to souls that are left in the dark, and never come out and express themselves. Once again, you allude to loneliness.

In stanza 3, you call these people bricks that, while are flimsy and worthless alone, are very capable when grouped with other bricks.

And, you finally end it on a high note, saying that even hopeless people have hope, and are always right.

Well, that's a lot to take in. I'm going to guess that you think that it's better to be together than apart. Even if I didn't get the meaning right, I felt... a connection. I really like this poem, considering my current spot in life.

In the end, this gets two thumbs up and a like! Keep writing!