Deanie

Hey Blackwood, I love this poem here. It's so direct, yet open at the same time. The migraine you're referring to could be anything. An actual migraine, or even a ...

Hey Nicholas, What a great poem here. It's evident that there are some comparison others will disagree on, but I think this poem is great. I like your choice of ...

Hi Dark, Interesting poem you've got there. It has a nice title which is really intriguing and makes me want to read the poem when I see it, so good ...

Hi Imaginator, I like the story you have here and it's a very interesting idea. I will be interested to see where you take this. One thing that would be ...

Hi Rishabh, This a nice chapter and continuation to your story. There are a few problems with tense here and so on but we can address those later. I like ...

Hi there Tempest. This was a pretty good story. You use great description and I really felt like I could feel what the girl felt. I only had a few ...

Hey Rbt000 So, I was interested as soon as I saw the word "parody" As far as this one goes, it's good and humorous. Made me laugh :D There were ...

Hi NightlyOwl, Well, this sure was an interesting beginning! I wonder where you'll go with an opening like this. You have great description, and nice action. I really liked the ...

Hey Skins, So this was an interesting second chapter. Although, in my own opinion I much prefer the first one. The personalities of the characters are still really clear, and ...

Hi there Cylenne! Deanie here as promised. Okay, let me start with the little nitpicks I noticed. It hit me in the first line already: you used 'sees' instead of ...

Hi Temi, Welcome back then! :D I liked this poem although it left me wondering what the committed sin was! It'd be nice if you could mention it somewhere, to ...

Hi Jon, I like the idea here. It will make an interesting rest to the story. The introductory paragraph was great! And I liked how you mentioned the destruction which ...

Hi Fortis! Wanderlust. The name alone is so beautiful it immediately drew me into reading it. And when I did, I was not disappointed :) You used some beautiful description ...

Hi Spinelli, Well, this was something interesting to read. The message here is pretty clear: you're telling people that when life gets tough, they just need to keep going and ...

Hi there Skins, So you have some good feedback on this first chapter already, and I'll try not to repeat what they've already said. First off, I really like the ...