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Re: The world
Hey Nikki! Danni here for a review. First off, I honestly didn't understand how this was poetry. It was really short and didn't rhyme or have any other features of ...
Mar 2, 2018 -
Re: A females perspective.
Hey Teryl! Danni here for a review! Welcome to YWS. This was quite hard to read because of the grammar errors, which were strewn throughout this work. I have pointed ...
Feb 28, 2018 -
Re: You Tell Me Things I Never Thought I Would Hear From A Man Who Loved Me
Hi Fluma! Danni here for a review! Thanks for the tag. I've said it before and I'll say it again: I love your formatting! It really adds something to the ...
Feb 27, 2018 -
Re: Nicolette
Hey Liz! Danni here for a review! First off, this was pretty short, so maybe work a little more on that. I saw the cover - it's great! Secondly, you ...
Feb 27, 2018 -
Re: Million miles an hour
Hey kid1809! Danni8 here for a review! There were grammar errors strewn throughout this, so I'd suggest running this over Word or something with a grammar checker first. What really ...
Feb 24, 2018 -
Re: "I'm OK." A Poem
Hey Spillthetea23! Danni here for a review! First off, it's OK not Ok, and I notice you use the latter quite a bit. Secondly, although this doesn't really matter as ...
Feb 24, 2018 -
Re: Blue Arrows ~ Chapter 1
Hi Blue! Danni here for a review! (Hey, that rhymes!) First off, there is only one twang, but three arrows? How does that work? Both the dwarves were sulking and ...
Feb 21, 2018 -
Re: print("Hi")
Hey SpaceSnickerdoodle! Danni here for a review! Let's get this out of the Green Room. First off, not sure where the knife come from? No mention of it in the ...
Feb 19, 2018 -
Re: Brotherly
Hi Mea! Danni here for a review! This was so beautiful. I love the idea. It was so well-written and it flowed really well. No grammar errors, which is good. ...
Feb 17, 2018 -
Re: deleted
Hi scribbleinks! Danni here for a review! Let's get this out of the Green Room. First off, the ending is a little confusing. Cody seems to be in love with ...
Feb 16, 2018 -
Re: Humans Are Stars
Hey Fluma! Danni here for a review! I really love this poem. It was really beautiful and well-written. Such a good Valentine's Day poem. Love the formatting! It really adds ...
Feb 14, 2018 -
Re: I am Teddy (A short story based off a prompt!)
Hey RedEyedRunt! Danni here for a review! First off, grammar. 'i' should be 'I'. You repeat this mistake several times throughout the work, so just be careful of that. Easy ...
Feb 11, 2018 -
Re: Music
Hi trailcoyote! Danni here for a review! This was pretty good. As a musician, I really liked it. I can't see any grammatical errors, which is good, so props to ...
Feb 11, 2018 -
Re: Chrys and Shujaa Reunited
Hi jims! Danni here for a review! *le gasp* "Yea, if you got one." This needs to be written out in full, so yeah not yea. I notice you use ...
Jan 30, 2018 -
Re: Abby
Hi LLK! Danni here for a review! I don't really understand what the story's getting at here. I get Abby has a wound on her arm and is dying but ...
Jan 30, 2018