This...this hit me right in the feels. You've done well.
It's nice and short, so it's not boring, but I did get confused when it said,
seethe tears in the doll’s eyes,
What doll are we talking about here? Are we referring to another toy in the same box? Are there more like this teddy bear who've been tossed away and forgotten?
Anyway, as for typos/syntax errors/whatever they're called, there's a missing space in the sentence I quoted above, and in two places I've spotted that you use a lowercase i instead of I. If all the i's were that way, I'd have thought it a stylistic choice - the bear deciding to accept that it's not a living being and it using lowercase i to denote it's lesser importance - but since I see you have used an upper case I elsewhere, it might just be some typos.
Either way, this was a really well written short story. I liked it a lot, and the feels made me postpone this review until I could look at it without feeling too sad
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