Daisuki

Please write more of this! (If you have time.) It has great potential and I would really like to read more :) You can do it!

This is deep, man.

My friend read this, and I thought his interpretation was cool, so here is what he said: Its sounds to me like two people in a relationship (the he, and ...

Hmm... I think this was a good idea for a storyline, but it would be a lot easier to read if the paragraphs were spaced out. -Dai

Oh wow, he does have a split personality? Knowing that really gives the poem a lot more meaning and background. I really did enjoy this poem, and your friend is ...

This was so cool! I like the personification of the storm, and how he, 'storms off.' That was really well done. Nice rhythm, nice rhyme. I really enjoyed reading this! ...

Aww... This was great. I don't have much to say besides that the writing itself was excellent, and I think you're going to win the contest :3 -Dai

This was slightly creepy (o.O), but extremely well written. It sounds like something from a published novel. By the way, I love that name - Jakil. Keep writing. -Dai

Oh Micki... *sniff* I think I almost cried... This was so sad... I liked the rhyme "together" and "feather," I think that sounded nice. Ooooh. I'm sad for both the ...

I worked so hard to make this not as flowery, and to improve from the orginal version - so I hope its better! I love these characters, but I feel ...

I like the words of this, and the idea definately, but the rhythm didn't really seem to work. It just didn't hit me and make me really think and feel. ...

If you like this, please click like! Okay, I did it. I humbled myself and asked for you to click the button. That was very difficult for me. But only ...

Hmmm... My mum read this when I was gone, except she jumped in right at the 'rape me or kill me' part and was like, "What the-?" So she read ...

Yeah, no one really seems to understand this poem, so I'm starting to think I'm crazy. But I don't really like it much, so I don't mind. My friend said ...

Yay! Thanks for posting this and for working out the little rhythm problems. It flows much better now. And thank you to the people who left comments! I'm glad you ...