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Ha, I was thinking about a dog as well. It was really sweet nd I liked it except for the last two stanzas...seemed to die down a little. But overall, ...

Thanks Tríona. I'm glad you liked it :)

Sounds like someone is having a hard time... A little lengthy, little cliche, could use a little imagery, and of the likes so yeah--work on it.

Even though I didn't agree with the poem, I thought it was very heart-felt and it wa good how you stirred away from cliches for the most part. Very well ...

Um...whoa. I don't really know the point of this but um... is there a point?

Thanks everyone...this is like one of my favorite songs that I've written. Do you come up with a tune first then put lyrics to it, or the other way around? ...

Thanks everyone...this is my most favorite thing that I have ever written. And the Pre Chorus is actually apart of the Chorus. I just put it there so I could ...

I loved everything except for "Touch Me"...seems like something else should go there. As for everything was great. I've never heard Andrew Lloyd Webber's Memory...instead, I was singing it along ...

Those younger children sure will know how to read the word "Of"...*cough*

AstrangedbeaR: First off, thank you for liking it...but my main reason for saying I won't continue to write poetry is because, at one point and time I was actually okay ...

Rhyming seemed forced. And the funny part is, I didn't even know that I was rhyming...I so did not mean to do that. Whupps...

And I witnessed it.

I'm sorry everyone for wasting your time. I'm never writing a poem...ever again.

The title sounds like something My Chemical Romance would sing. The song itself...for some reason I started thinking of the Beastie Boys.

Well, thanks so much for the critique...I asked for strong critiquing and that's what I got. But to tell you the truth, I'm not a poet...if anything, a lyricist...this was ...