Smashing Modems

by Poppi

Published October 28, 2005

I aughtn't to like you God
I aught to hate your fucking guts.
You've wrecked my life
Killed my dad
You're killing my sister.
I'd talk to someone else that wasn't you
But there is no one else who sits
At the switchboard of life and death
Pulling out plugs and smashing modems
Turning switches on and off
Connecting wires and dragging programs apart
You can't just lose faith if you have it...
It's like having a stalker that walks behind you
He follows me around
And it's faith I hate not you
Because I aught to hate you
But I've never been too reasonable.
You're not exactly helping me out right now
But maybe it's just a test
And in case you hadn't noticed
All this trouble is getting in the way of my mocks
Which I shall undoubtedly fail
Which shall be your fault.
But I still won't hate you...

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Nov 1, 2005

Thanks :D

(just out of interest - what was it exactly you disagree with?)

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Chevy
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Chevy commented Comment · Oct 31, 2005

Even though I didn't agree with the poem, I thought it was very heart-felt and it wa good how you stirred away from cliches for the most part.

Very well done.

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 31, 2005

Thanks loads :D
It's a pretty odd poem I must admit

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Duskglimmer
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Duskglimmer wrote a review Review · Oct 31, 2005

Back on the topic of the poem:

I liked it. I thought I wasn't just because of the opening line, but it turned into something different than I thought it would be. And I really enjoyed it. I don't have the brain capicity right now to say anything more than that, but I'll try to come back later and give you something more constructive if you like.

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 30, 2005

Sophie is this meant to be some kind of message because I asked you to the ball?

*blushes* it's so pretty *tries to think of something smart to say* *fails*

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Sophie
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Sophie wrote a review Review · Oct 29, 2005

"Love is in the air... Everywhere I look around... Love is in the air... Every sight and every sound...."

"The look... of love... is in... your eyes..."

"Kiss me, beneath the milky twilight. Lead me, out on the moonlit floor. Lift your open hand, strike up the band and make the fireflies dance. Silver moon's sparkling. So kiss me..."

"another song of the like...."

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 29, 2005

That's fine - we all get grumpy sometimes :D

(sorry for post-padding - couldn't resist!!)

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Twinkling Starz
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Twinkling Starz commented Comment · Oct 29, 2005

You can say that again. :)

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 29, 2005

That's fine - we all get grumpy sometimes :D

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Twinkling Starz
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Twinkling Starz commented Comment · Oct 29, 2005

It's okay, I understand how you feel, somedays I'm grumpy and snap at absolutley nothing.

;)

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 29, 2005

Sorry guys - missed that part of the rules! I'll rate them from now on. Thought everyone here was 13+
you didn't offend me Twinkly Person I just get REALLY het up about stuff. Comes from strange lifestyle and coffee abuse I'm sure.

Yeah I get the rating thing now. Sorry about all that! (i'll delete if you think it's tasteless anyway?)

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Firestarter
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Firestarter wrote a review Review · Oct 29, 2005

Pieces must be rated if they need to be. Please abide by the rules. If you don't agree with posting ratings, well...too bad. They help protect younger members, and also prevent not so tasteful pieces from appearing on the front page.

Rules - forum/viewtopic.php?t=3

Rule 1 states: 1. If you think your story/poem is inappropiate for some audiences, then leave a note indicating as such at the top of your story/poem.

The note has now been replaced by a rating system to make it easier.

Twinkling Starz wrote a review Review · Oct 29, 2005

Sorry if I offended you or anything, but I didn't mean that I can't deal with it. I can. I'm saying that others younger might not like the fact that there isn't any rating at all and does have a few offendable words.
And yes, I know that people are in charge of what they read, but when they click on the link to your poem, they would have liked to have a warning or something.

And isn't there a rule that it has to be rated?

-*Twinkles

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 28, 2005

That's mean! I don't want it rated!
I totally don't believe in rating stuff... I mean people are in charge of what they read... I coulda dealt with it at thirteen.


I dealt with it at ten.

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Firestarter
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Firestarter commented Comment · Oct 28, 2005

She means a rating as in age guidance. I'll do it for you.

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Poppi
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Poppi commented Comment · Oct 28, 2005

How the hell do I rate my own poem? It's not up to me whether it's good or not!

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Twinkling Starz
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Twinkling Starz commented Comment · Oct 28, 2005

Very dramatic and it showed your feelings well.

It could have used a rating as well.



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