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I can kind of tell that your style is beginning to change. But, for the good.

Please Please Don't Don't You You We We!!! AGH!!!!!! Repitious work drives me INSANE!

thanks a lot guys, even though if i could, i would trash this poem. there's so much to be done to it...i don't even know if i feel like it.

Wow...a little long...but, anyway, I'm surprised with myself...I actually enjoyed reading it.

Very...detailed:-D "in black&white photographs and" Shouldn't there be a space in there? I didn't particulary care for the first line, neither the first two in the second stanza...just seemed kind ...

Oh, anf is your hair really green? If so, that's awesome.

Well, considering this is the first thing I have read by you, very nice first impression. However, I don't find this to be a horrible poem, but it does need ...

Aside from the fact that it sounded like something in a 1970s picture book.... I don't know what else there is to say. Other than, I hate old picture books.

The title was wonderful--but the poem was...well, all rhymy and everything and I just can't stand that... Sorry

Very beautiful, but once again.... (see the evanescence song)

You had me for a second. I thought you wrote this...I think this is supposed to be for songs you wrote? Anyway, it was cliche to me.

In general, the song was a little bit inconsistent--you just seemed to travel from one room to the next...never staying in one spot to really concentrate on thing...

Aside from the fact that I didn't completely understand it, I liked the way it was written...I, of course could never compose anything of such great stuff always sucks next ...

: Scracthes head : Yeah, probably a little too abstract. But I can't complain, because I don't know how to write anything but literal stuff...which is sad, but true.

The last stanza is what caught me. The rest was decent...but I've never read anything of the calibur that the last stanza carried...wow.