Checkered Clouds

by Superfreakazoid

Published March 7, 2005

Checkered clouds paint the sky,
In a land where all is joy and blithe,
Crystalline teardrops never fall,
In a land where you can have it all.

Mirrored trees speckle horizon,
In a land where skin will never wizen,
Breathy wind blows sunny hair,
In a land of no compare.

Laughing sunrises grace the skies,
In a land of no goodbyes,
Weeping willows share the rain,
In a land where nothing’s chained.


Alice in Wonderland peeks through,
In a land with a spectacular view,
Walls of grief can never find,
This land that is hidden inside.

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Superfreakazoid
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Superfreakazoid commented Comment · Mar 9, 2005

well, yeah, i write all rhyme-y and everything, it's just my style. Thanks, again...

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Firestarter
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Firestarter commented Comment · Mar 7, 2005

This poem doesn't really have any point to it, and the rhyming gives it an almost comical reading. Otherwise your vocabulary and structure is good, but you picked the wrong topic this time.

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Chevy
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Chevy commented Comment · Mar 7, 2005

The title was wonderful--but the poem was...well, all rhymy and everything and I just can't stand that...
Sorry



Patience is the strength of the weak, impatience is the weakness of the strong.
— Immanuel Kant, Philosopher