Published March 7, 2005
Hey, you, kiss the clouds,
Breathe in the sun,
Scream out loud,
Dance in the rain,
Smell the dirt,
Feel your breath,
‘Neath your shirt.
Hey, you, touch the skies,
Smell the flowers,
See through my eyes,
Splash in water,
Be the breeze,
Sing the wind,
Through the trees.
Hey, you, whisper night,
Sprinkle stars,
Laugh with delight,
Glow with music,
Tickle the hills,
Show the world,
What you feel.
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'S'pose that's what I get for writing 60-second poems. Thanks for all the feedback, though.
Heh, I was amused for a second.
It isn't really poetry though.
Aside from the fact that it sounded like something in a 1970s picture book....
I don't know what else there is to say. Other than, I hate old picture books.
I LOVE this!!! but the ryhming seemed VERY forced, like when you did this:
And when you did 'See through my eyes' it threw the flow. But I really like it!!!