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As I was reading this, I acquired the feeling of being brought down to a lower and lower state of existence. I loved how you brought it to a full ...

Brilliant, and I love the energy! However, I must say, some of that energy seem to die down in the last two lines. It wasn't as strong as the other ...

Thanks WL, But for everyone: just out curiousity, aside from the fact that the structure...well, sucks , how is the imagery? I've been experimenting with applying real-life situations that I ...

I love the imagery and outstanding ending. I'm sorry...maybe I'm just in a really good mood but I don't really have critique for this.

and they were just fools, with dull, dull eyes yeah, they were fools, with dull, dull minds. I dont like the repetition here, it seems immature compared to the rest ...

I know I'm replying to this forever and a half later, but yes! I totally forgot about this..wow, this was back in the TYWC days. We've come such a long ...

I love the idea but pass the first stznza, I'm not necessarily sure it was well-written. It could use some improvement...different wording. But it has potential. The French was unexpected, ...

I found this to be romantic yet in a strange sense. It was unusual, I thought but I still understood it/enjoyed it. And it was refreshing. I especially liked the ...

Like cradium said, it was well-written. And it flowed very well. Not necessarily sure I found it strikingly provocative as most of your other works, but it was still enjoyable. ...

Boys: Keep it on topic or this thread will be locked. Fantasy: Don't mess with Brad. He hails from Valhalla and has given you the constructive criticism you asked for. ...

Well, it's really good...you should definitely do it again ;)

I love the imagery here...especially concerning the I-10 since it's something I can relate to. Overall, I agree with wasn't whiny at all. And were you trying to rhyme rest, ...

Wow, this is very different. I really enjoyed this aside from all the "just a little bits" at the end...kind of drove me crazy a bit. But other than that, ...

To everyone: Everything you all have said is so incredibly true. I'm so thankful for your criticism. Originally, this was a song. I pulled it apart and put it back ...

I really like the characters. Very real like.