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Perfection

by Snoink


Okay! This poem lives and breathes on formatting, so you can check it out, in its very pretty formatting, at the link below:

http://www.writely.com/View.aspx?docid=dggrtn3h_0xngs6g

Tell me what you think here! :D


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Wed Sep 06, 2006 3:18 am
Snoink says...



The end looks too big. It's supposed to taper off into a whisper, but the font starts too big and stuff... maybe if I italicize it, it'll look smaller and sound more like a hiss...




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Wed Sep 06, 2006 3:11 am
David Guinness says...



Nice job, Snoink. Interesting approach to poetry. I have no complaint, though I agree with Chevy about the end of it.

I'd like to hear this vocally performed some day.




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Tue Sep 05, 2006 11:43 pm
Chevy says...



Well, it's really good...you should definitely do it again ;)




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Tue Sep 05, 2006 8:41 pm
Snoink says...



No... this was my first attempt at using formatting like this.




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Tue Sep 05, 2006 6:29 pm
Chevy says...



Wow, this is very different. I really enjoyed this aside from all the "just a little bits" at the end...kind of drove me crazy a bit. But other than that, it's a work of art to me. Do you have more poetry formatted like this?





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