The end looks too big. It's supposed to taper off into a whisper, but the font starts too big and stuff... maybe if I italicize it, it'll look smaller and sound more like a hiss...
Okay! This poem lives and breathes on formatting, so you can check it out, in its very pretty formatting, at the link below:
http://www.writely.com/View.aspx?docid=dggrtn3h_0xngs6g
Tell me what you think here! 
The end looks too big. It's supposed to taper off into a whisper, but the font starts too big and stuff... maybe if I italicize it, it'll look smaller and sound more like a hiss...
Nice job, Snoink. Interesting approach to poetry. I have no complaint, though I agree with Chevy about the end of it.
I'd like to hear this vocally performed some day.
No... this was my first attempt at using formatting like this.
Wow, this is very different. I really enjoyed this aside from all the "just a little bits" at the end...kind of drove me crazy a bit. But other than that, it's a work of art to me. Do you have more poetry formatted like this?
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