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The first time I read it, I just read it and just kinda just...read through it. But now it's the third time I've read it and I'm getting attached to ...

The repetitive "I" was irritating...the reader can't really relate. It might actually sound nice (well, unique rather) if you didn't have anything where the "I"s are. But the next time ...

Out of all the vulgar language there is, I think the F word is the most lousy way of expressing yourself, and like Qi's poem (well, this isn't as near ...

To be honest, if I had heard this read aloud, I would have laughed my *** off, especially with it coming from you. But reading it in my head it ...

I liked how you switched from first person to third person without any specific notification. "been any great purpose in corralling the anxious foals, deflecting neighbors’ cattle, waiting in frost ...

Seems like something Trapt or Linkin Park would sing...nothing wrong with that, of course. I think it would be very good with heavy guitars and a double bass. A little ...

I loved it and you know I did. "and watch you lay the pieces of your fire precisely, so exact you could probably tell me now the way the ashes ...

Well, what exactly is it about? I get the idea it's fantasy and I have never read fantasy before but I honestly don't want to jump onto the Lord of ...

It's not the easy writing with Old English but I think you did a great job. I've never been able to do this. Do you by any chance go to ...

It had a very fictional sense to it and I loved it. It would make an awesome picture book. Narrowly escaping being crushed by giant wheels. (Truckers rarely get a ...

It was short...didn't totally rhyme properly but it was okay. I didn't really get what you meant by after you write on the face of the paper it becomes the ...

Whoa the rhyming was ways off. It could have been very good if it hadn't been for that because you actually used imagery. The worse rhyming combination was "totality" and ...

Well, here we've got 92 lines of teenage angst. Some of it was just unecessary. For instance, "Big cock" in the first stanza didn't have to be there. Overall, it ...

Gosh...13? *Envious* Man, it was different but so unparalleled... "I can’t stop looking Afraid I’ll go blind I’ve never had good eyesight, and Maybe I’m missing something And maybe I’m ...

Whoever the guy is you wrote this for...I think you should save it for him. This poem was full of cliches that lacked imagery and for some reason, I get ...