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Happy Review Day! Well, while the plot is interesting enough, I'm wrestling with the style...sorry. First off, why not explain earlier that the feeling in the gut is more than ...

Happy Review Day! This piece is, for the most part, sound. The characters are what really drive this piece. As for the wording, can be iffy. He wobbled left and ...

Happy Review Day! Well then. This quite well-written. Excellent indeed. You really seem to have mastered the tone and mood of this piece. It feels fairytale-like; wistful, almost. It's easily ...

Happy Review Day! Strangest of all was the urge to laugh. That line is brilliant. Simply brilliant. Pensive, yet opening up curiosity. Marvelous hook. There was anger, underneath his sudden ...

Happy Review Day! Green grass partitioned the walkway and the asphalt road. While this opening sentence isn't cliche, it's certainly generic, and offers nothing apart from the setting. I suggest ...

Happy Review Day! Well, for starters, this was unexpected. This level of originality caught me off-guard. A fourteen-year-old agent who selects their own missions? Intriguing. I'm not quite sure what ...

Happy Review Day! Well, this seems like a slightly unorthodox piece. All the more refreshing, I say! To begin, as a whole, the piece seemed to gloss over fine details, ...

Happy Review Day! Let's begin with your first paragraph. The first sentence is a bit long, sure, but I think that the amazing imagery employed makes up for that. The ...

Happy Review Day! I adore the unexpected style of this piece. I've never really seen an introduction quite like that. Although capitalization would be appreciated. The poem was lovely, and ...

Happy Review Day! A woman in dark clothing stood up in front of her covenant. Let's start with this, shall we? To begin, well, I'm confused. I mean, the first ...

Happy Review Day! Pertaining to the beginning, the beginning of the beginning didn't seem all that original. Sure, it was interesting, but it's been interesting before. I'm quite glad that ...

Happy Review Day! First sentence impressions are always important. Yours wastes no time picking up the action, and draws the reader in with some excellent imagery. However, the way you ...

Happy Review Day! Beginning with the first line, it can be said that it's quite intriguing. It also allows you to portray the relationship between Quinn and Horry, which is ...

Good day to you. Obviously, the biggest part of your prologue is your writing style, I can clearly see that. Now, this may have its advantages and disadvantages. I can ...

I quite liked this piece, actually. Brimming with suspense, further characterization...yep, it's everything you'd look for in later chapters. The way you describe the mood of the morgue room is ...