Chandni

Yes I agree, I've indeed argued myself through "beneath our melancholic ocean" line. I will edit indeed, thnx for enlightning my image a bit :)

hahaha ik wou persee geen stanza's schaap :P

Thank you all for the critiques :) For Brad :) the leaves and ocean they do refer to lovers as in human to nature form, I will try to see ...

Thank you great people of YWS for the lovely comments :) and for all of you who had some confusion with the word "canescent" Definitions of canescent: adjective: covered with ...

thnx :)

thnx for the crit niteowl ;) I changed "In my heart, In my soul" it does sound rather odd after I repeat "Octave Heart" at the end :) thnx for ...

Very Very enjoyable :) I like ur rhyming although it's very simple

ny comments ? please :D

thnx electric :) I've changed it a bit, hope it flows better, although I personally didn't think the flow was all that bad like that what you suggested about "Driven" ...

hmmm, thnx for ur comment ;) would you be so kind telling me what kind of poetry is it then ?? Dramatic ?? thnx

I......understand.... the title makes it a bit confusing, I so did not want to name it Untitled :?

urghhhh....why does ''overdose'' make you think about suicide !?!?!? its not..... jeeezzz

yess it was inspired by DCFC :wink:

Funny !! Hahahaha

my... yeah i dunno i'm not honna put a name or anything it is supossed to be a name tough.. his own soul... :wink: