Chandni

As Snoink said, it starts rather dull but finds it way later on. You could've made the title a bit more intriguing. A bit too simplistic. You could've done a ...

Aha, that was a brilliant read :) Truly I loved it. I would call it a tee bit abstract, but that's just me. After all abstract is one thing that ...

Mhmm, I lack emotion it read very dull and boring. It doesn't flow, I'm just reading sentence after sentence and there is no sense of excitement to be found. I ...

It's looking nice as a whole. It flowed well and I like your use of description. I figured it was rather hard to understand the poem and align the stanza's ...

I wished you could go deeper on this, it's short for what could've been longer and more enjoyable. I'll have to agree with Xanthan and say, "shhhh..." is better off ...

Hehe, this is very random indeed. I can't help but sink in the tragic randomness you've created here. Try sorting out your mind, seeing the line apart from each other ...

That was highly enjoyable :D Serious yet there seems to be a slight touch of humor in there as well. I liked your rhyming it wasn't forced at all. Although ...

Very simplistic, you were straight to your point yet you could've used some description. For example: I think of her her smile so bright her hair is black but underneath ...

It was well written and I enjoyed the descriptions you gave, definitely added some emotion there. The line breaks annoyed me though, you could've added it all together or form ...

Hey Twist, I've got to agree with Chevy, the first stanza was indeed a bit mystic, which could've been better. But on the other hand, it being mystic and all, ...

Nicely done :) I really have nothing to say, which makes this critique rather meaningless. But hey I'm raising it up for you to possibly get a critique that actually ...

Hmm to me this sounds more like a statement rather than a poem. Depression is when you know you’ll do something wrong,did it anyway, and fear the consequences.It’s when you ...

Ah I'm sorry but I haven't got much to say here, short and simplistic, yet nice descriptions and to the point indeed ;) One thing : Teary eye's, I think ...

Hehe, tell your friend it doesn't suck, just has some ups and downs like every other poem. It's just how good she covers the downs with the ups ;) First ...

It was a nice read indeed, Sworddance did most of the critiquing so I'm only going to say this lol I liked your rhyme scene and you managed to keep ...