CardDragon

If you are looking for better things to use instead darkness of a shadow; use alternate words. Or phrases or even sentences that describe the shadow or the instance of ...

Thank you everyone for posting, I'll take what you said into consideration. This excerpt is more based off a comic I am making, so it was kinda of this quick ...

I meant that people are confused when you just put a random name in and continue the story. You could go and describe the character and then have the main ...

yeah. I've been out for some years. But I have finally returned.

oh, alright.

this was a very good work-i can't say anything else because I haven't read the entire book to understand what's happening.

oh thank you deanie- maybe I will return

These are good feelings in the poem but you might want to change the format on here-it was hard to understand. cheers and goodbye, CardDragon RETURNS!

I really want you with me That is a poem.

If you want to see the original head to original for better format!

well yeah! This was actually from my blog and I actually repeated the chorus through out the thing and I really didn't have time to fix it correctly on this ...

I feel a lot with this story-rather recollection of thoughts and events. I have no way to improve this-for I have never encountered something as explicit as this on this ...

This was great it rhymed and everything and it had a good pattern to it to and it reminded me of love. Good job, Tenyo, and tell everyone i'm back!

well I don't feel like writing any poetry, cause I am not a poet any more-these are good rock song lyrics.

I miss you its not real just along my new theme of endless insanity.