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Mmm. A tad difficult to chew, but still delicious. I liked some of the images and ideas in here, but I'm not really sure what this poem is about. Contrasting ...

Nice! This was an enjoyable read. It moved along at a nice pace and managed to be entertaining the entire time; I didn't feel myself wanting to skip parts or ...

Interesting stuff, there. First of all, don't label your parts. I mean, put the Roman numerals I and II there, but nix the "PART". Usually these divisions are used for ...

How depressing! Why do you squeeze two dying patients into one chapter? It was very un-House-like, and I didn't like it. Well, the Rodriguez woman was House-like, but Jon crying ...

Ah, talkative old women. Classic. Yay, things are falling into place! I'm so behind. I really must catch up on these episodes. No real comments here. This chapter didn't do ...

Homosexuality? Delightful. I think this chapter may have introduced too much at once. They say the reader will only take one surprise at a time. I found it hard to ...

I agree with Snoink in that this poem is very sporadic. It's extremely vague; you're basically listing a bunch of images and emotions that aren't applying to any specific event ...

I think this poem has some beautiful images, as xanthan said, but I had a lot of trouble understanding it. Who is "we"? I mean, the tone and images are ...

Very complex. I get the general feeling of this piece; the tone was excellent, and you had some wonderful imagery in there. The first stanza was great. The only thing ...

Wow, that's some strong emotion. It took me a couple read-throughs to actually understand it, though. Each phrase is very drawn out and complex, so I think it would be ...

This poem didn't strike me as anything special. At most, I feel it would amount to a rap song, but without rhyme. It seems to have an element of song-like ...

Ooh, gives me shivers. I enjoyed this, but why is it double-spaced? It's hard to read that way. The rhythm is nice, but...it's just that you use so many adjectives ...

Your story has a fine meaning, and flows well, erm, except for the grammatical, spelling, punctuation errors, etc. I enjoyed the message, though. The ending was fantastic. I have always ...

This is good work; I could really connect to it. Everything from "We walk barefoot" on was just great. The melodic whispers of the swaying reeds, drunk on the dew ...

All: This poem is about getting tattoos. Best, Bad God, it makes so much sense now. I didn't realize that when I read the poem. Perhaps it wasn't obvious enough, ...