Cade

no, you're not missing anything. it was random. the general feeling was that of being comforted by a ghost singing in the dark, because in the middle of the night ...

Hmm...interesting subject. As with a lot of your work, some of it's too cryptic for me, but the images and rhythm were, as usual, well done. Brown sweat on my ...

I second everything Clau said. READ LOTS OF GOOD POETRY. She also suggested capitalizing the first letter of every line; I don't think that's always necessary, but at least capitalize ...

Aww! I generally don't venture into Romantic Fiction, but I was on the homepage looking at all the recent posts, and here was this. They're all so pretentious, it's cute. ...

I agree, the ending sounded strange - like an essay. The story was fine, though. I'd like to see you mix up your sentences a little more; so many of ...

Soon-to-be girlfriend? Somebody has plans, eh? I'm really sick and disoriented and angry right now, and am therefore rendered unable to write a coherent critique. I agree with Clau; this ...

Adorable idea, with that twist ending I suppose kiddies would like. You said it was a children's story? I can totally see that; the writing is simple but enjoyable. What ...

"My mama always said life was like a box of chocolates..." -Forrest Gump This poem didn't bring anything new to the table, and it's basically a bunch of phrases babbling ...

That's cute. This seems to be more of a joke, so I'm not going to critique it. I disagree with Adam; I like that he talks to the reader. I ...

The rhyme was difficult to read because the ends of phrases and the ends of lines don't match up. It can be done, of course, but the right places just ...

This poem has failed for me because it didn't make me feel anything or appreciate anything the author said. It was a bunch of cliches, except for that random Star ...

I agree with bubbles and Cameron. This seems a bit different from the rest of your work. I enjoyed it in a different way. Rhyme! My goodness! The rhyme isn't ...

How do I love thee? Let me count the ways... Okay, your poem didn't quite measure up to Sonnet 43. The idea here is cliche and overdone; the poem wasn't ...

The first line drew me in right away. It sets down the basic idea for the rest of the poem and laid down something concrete, this pen drawing bit. Okay, ...

Gosh, get some punctuation in here! And capitalization and whatnot. "I'll be that girl", great! You got that song by the Barenaked Ladies stuck in my head. Good music, theirs. ...