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Hi there.. I love this.. I think that transitions could be smoother, especially into the last couple of lines. I think that perhaps some more imagery/emotion would be nice, but ...

Hi there :) The smiley faces were a bit distracting, but.. fine. :) I too have had a concussion, a MAJOR one. But I didn't have any of umm.. that. ...

Hi- okay. So I'm going to start by saying, I'm not a huge advocate of punctuation. However.. in this piece.. you need it. Don't ask me why. But when I ...

I really liked the concept of this.. I've recently read quite a few poems that are about anxiety, and this seemed to be similar, but a bit different. However, I ...

This is called a "Senyru", a Haiku that isn't about nature. It is the same type of poem in all categories excepting that. I do like this one.. very simple, ...

Nice piece.. I would try broadening your word choice or making the phrasing more interesting in some way. I would also suggest that you throw in some metaphors or similes.. ...

Nice piece.. a few things.. First of all... My GOSH that was tiny. Fortunately, with my awesome eyesight (maybe a little bit aided by my equally awesome glasses) I was ...

Personally, I disagree with the last reviewer.. a lot of excellent stories are actually quite simple.. a day in the life of someone else is almost always interesting to an ...

This was beautifully written. It was a pleasure to read. However, it was difficult to read. I would suggest breaking this up into different paragraphs to make it easier on ...

Love this.. you have a great rhyme scheme, and while not entirely subtle, it doesn't need to be. Some poems just need that sort of thing to really work. The ...

Okay- first of all- I didn't finish this. It was a bit confusing for me to follow. But some critiques on the writing style- Tenses- You switched back and forth ...

Nice piece.. I loved the beginning, but wasn't crazy about the rest. The imagery was a bit confusing, and the breaks seemed randomly placed.. the tone at the beginning was ...

I. Love. This. The outpouring, the absolute I'm-letting-go-of-everything-onto-this-piece-of-paper f***er, is AMAZING. Every phrase is a piece of diamond. Not gold. Gold is altogether too gaudy, and th

Great piece.. the emotion was very well expressed, the repetition very well used. I would suggest perhaps changing the structure around a bit.. it was very open, and I think ...

I like this piece..:) The last line was nice.. a different spin to the end of summer, for once. Personally, I'm not a huuge fan of rhyming poems.. that tend ...