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Nice story- I miss having a dog. I would elaborate more on the dog than the carride- you made the focus of the story a bit ambiguous, but because of ...

Wonderful- very simple, but nicely unfolded for the reader. Very sweet story altogether. I would try to make the end match the rest in originality- I didn't find it up ...

Overall, I think that you have an interesting plot here. But, it gets a bit confusing. I like the tension towards the beginning, the action, the sense of "What in ...

Hi there :) So, nice piece. I would try to perhaps make the language more natural; as parts it seemed almost inhuman, something that we wouldn't think to ourselves. For ...

I think that perhaps the beginning and end could be worked on a bit more. The beginning sounds almost like stage directions in a play- like you're setting the scene ...

Powerful story- I would try to perhaps add more punctuation or split this up to make it a bit easier on the eyes. It wasn't so much the font type ...

I think that this could be a nice start to a story- however, there are a couple of things that I would try to fix and keep with you as ...

I would try making this more emotional- you say that they're angry or hateful or loving, but we can't really see it. You say it, but we don't experience it. ...

I really like this- it's simple, but conveys a lot. The only nitpick I have is that the repetition of "reach" really bothers me. You could get away with it ...

In rhyming poems, I would try to make the middle syllable and the whole of word seem to rhyme rather than the end. This seems to create more of a ...

Personally, I really liked this. The metaphor of "dead fish" kind of bothered me, because it didn't connect very well, but otherwise, I loved it. I don't think there needs ...

So, I like this story first off- nicely done. :) There were a couple of plot things that kind of irked me though: 1- why was Gabriel assigned to only ...

Hi there :) So, I think that perhaps this is, as mentioned above, a tongue twister of sorts, or a phrase that sounds interesting, and may be an interesting thought ...

Okay: So I'm going to go through my reactions before actually reviewing this. First thirty seconds of reading: What the fuck? Minute and a Half: Ohhhhkay. That makes sense. Cool ...

Wonderful piece- very simple, but concise and powerfully stated. I really don't have anything bad to say about this. Pretty useless review altogether. BUT, very nicely done. Personally, I think ...