Butterfly18

Hi. I'd just like to say that, I couldn't get through it, and that was before I was scrolling down to find this comment box when i knew, "Oh yes ...

Hey, I like this little piece. I think at the beginning, the constant sentence starters as, I would remember... are repetitive, obviously, but makes it seem bland, and it distracts ...

First of all I think This has a lot if tension which is great. But I'm wondering why you don't want names in this piece? And since you don't want ...

Sorry to be brief about this, but the opening few lines I read, and the last few lines I just read seem a bit out-of-place, perhaps. I can tell, or ...

Hey, finally I have found the time to review this piece. So overall I liked it, and your descriptive language is very nice. Perhaps at times though it's a bit ...

I really liked this. It's an interesting little narrative poem with a nice even pace. I like how you link the second stanza to the third with repetition: "...over your ...

This is interesting. I can tell you're into your science terms, and that's great. However, you open strongly with an expedition log and a hook - reaching Helio 3, but ...

I read a piece a while ago from you with the same problem, a 'skin tag' she wants removed, but it's a bit different, and was titled 'Skin Tag' if ...

Hey, so sorry it took so long for me to get here. I've been sooo busy these last few months; college study. I reviewed the first part again, to refresh ...

I really liked this read even though I'm not familiar with the previous chapters. I like the way your characters interact with each other. :) I did notice a lot ...

Hi, how have you been? I really liked the idea of this story. The format however is distracting, you need to break up your text into paragraphs. There is a ...

Hello, I like the foreboding essence this has. I'm working on something similar, like a doomed-earth thing. I don't know how else to describe it. Haha. The idea I assume ...

Hello, Firstly, I really liked the concept of this piece, and I know its not a fully formed idea yet so I had that in mind as I read. This ...

Hello, RenGrey. First of all, I don't like the idea of a poll just because it can't really be judged that easily. This is what I noticed immediately, The October ...

Present tense. That's what I'm trying to have a go at. :) Don't think I write it as good as you tho, haha. Anyway, Shinda. Here's my thoughts. Kate breathes ...