Butterfinger

Hi-ya!!! First off- I'm a huge phantom of the opera fan!! Absolutely love it! Anyway! Your sister has got amazing writing talent! I would definitely enter it in the fair! ...

I've been contemplating going into counseling, and I imagine it would be just as you've described. Except more crying, tissues, and a big fluffy pillow. As I float above heartaches ...

Hi-ya! I'm usually a fan of rhyming as long as it reads smoothly and the flow is consistent. This piece however I regret to say, felt terribly forced. My favorite ...

Hi-ya!! I'm a huge fan of poets that I haven't yet read any of their work. Your title drew me in and I love your piece! Here's my comments: Breathing ...

Hi-ya! First off- you write beautifully!! This is so your style! It is easy to follow and flows nicely because of the rhyming. This is one of a few poems ...

Hi-ya!!!! I'm a huge fan of writers block, because (and this piece is testament of it) when your brain halts, with no direction for where you want to go, it ...

Hi-ya!!! First off, I haven't read any of your work yet, so this is very interesting!! I love your title because it brings in the reader with suspense. My favorite ...

Hi-ya!!! Welcome! Welcome! First off- I applaud you for writing this-it surely has its own meaning and the way you phrase most of the lines brings us as you readers ...

Hi-ya!!! First off-love your title--it made me really want to click on this & read it over a few times to dig deep and really find the core of it's ...

Hi-ya!!!!! I love this poem! Very fun to read! It makes my thinker think!!! You have a way with words that no matter which direction you take it, it's Brilliant! ...

Hi-ya!!!! I love a poem that paints a picture that's worth so much more. My favorite stanza: The engine splutters a dark deathly slime Great Imagery!! Poison running though the ...

Hi-ya!!!! First, Your title is very interesting. It should be 'Breathe'. It makes my thinker think! This stanza is like your willing the rain to take you, and essentially kill ...

Hi-ya!!! Your piece has a wonder flow to it! It never seemed like you were forcing any words to fit your scheme. The simplicity of it makes it a wonderful ...

Hi-ya!! I think you have a Brilliant poem here! Here's my comments and suggestions! Do with them what you will! They are just that, suggestions, but you are the author, ...

I can really feel the emotion in this piece because this is what I'm going through right now with my sister. Brilliant writing! Something that bugs me: I will be ...