Burrow

That was one of the best chapters so far. It was well written. It helped provide a bit more information on Lara's ex-boyfriend. Overall it was a real good read. ...

I must say I probably enjoyed that the most out of all your chapters so far, I learnt a lot about Miguel and Lara and it was funny at times, ...

You didn't tell me you posted this !!! I loved it by the way!! Anyway to the review... I really like the way you started this off and the story ...

Jack here for a review. Ok to start of this is very interesting and you have a very good vocabulary. Though I suggest that maybe you stop using dark, darker, ...

Wow, that was amazing, I read that, listening to a song, a sad one. That made it so much better. You kept me on the edge of my seat when ...

Ok jack here for a review. I really like this story line. It kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time. I didn't see that ending coming. ...

Ok first of all, I really like this story, it made me laugh a few times. I don't normally to that when I'm reading. I especially like how you explained ...

Jack here for a review. Ok to start of I haven't yet had the chance to read the other 5 chapters, but I wasn't confused at all which Is a ...

I like this story, it was different to most thinks I read, and I really enjoyed it. You sentences were well done, and there was hardly ever a comma out ...

Ok firstly the heading, I believe you spelt Murder wrong. Anyway i really love this piece, it is a well written poem, and it flows nicely, though it did make ...

I really liked that, the story flowed, and I read the whole think, which surprised me, it flows very well. Though sometimes it was hard to understand you when you ...

I have to agree with everyone else below, if you break each chapter up, you will get reviews, and from the parts I read I am really interested, and it ...

This piece is very interesting, and it makes you wonder what comes next, though I know it may be a prologue and poem, but I suggest that you reveal a ...

I like this, it is written well, and you keep the flow going well during the story, just one suggestion though, I'm not sure if it would work, but personally ...

Wow that was amazing, i loved every bit, when i was starting to read it a scroolled down to the end and saw how long it was and i was ...