BrokenSword

I really liked it, it seemed dark and I am still wondering what sort of affliction the person was suffering from. I enjoyed it. :) However I was slightly confused ...

I'm slightly uncomfortable with the fact that I don't really know what the gender of the person writing the diary is. I'm assuming they're female but it would be nice ...

P.S. Don't worry, Twit, I wouldn't actually write a story so typically. Knowing me I'd have to throw in some other quirky character somewhere. Maybe I'll have Ellen dress up ...

I'm actually looking for spoilers for this one. I got burned out on Harry Potter some time after the fifth book came out, and I'm reading two other books, I ...

Paolini has openly said he put ideas taken from Dragonriders of Pern, Star Wars, LOTR and other books and melded them together into Eragon. Basically it's an insanely large fanfic. ...

I've never read them, but the fact someone told me part of the dialogue went like this -- "Sorry," [character] apologised, has put me off forever. Don't forget: "The young ...

I thought it was good too. I liked your description of Hannah playing the piano, especially when you mentioned a white field with black obstacles. The only thing is I ...

Well, first thing I noticed (and I don't know if it's just me), it's incredibly wordy. So much, I can't concentrate on what's happening in the story and I'm trying ...

Hooray, chapter 3! I really like this story, and I know it's a good one when I lose track of time while reading it. :D I love it when that ...

I really liked this. Your writing style is engaging and I was interested in the story from the start. Crowds of grief stricken parents surrounded the car This kind of ...

I walked down the long hallway with the blue-carpeted walls, populated by friendly, blue-clad nurses who nodded at me and smiled as I walked along. There's a bit of repetition ...

Hugh Vaughn was contemplating on whether he should enter the ballroom that had been hosted by his sister Rowena. I think this whole sentence is a little too much information ...

Ooo, I LOVED it! So wonderful! I love your writing style. I sat in the old car, worn out from so many years of running. You might want to word ...

Awake. Vague images, feelings, sounds and emotions dissipate, like a dream escaping conscious memory. His eyes open, and stare blindly into the blackness. Soil. It covers him from head to ...

OOOH! I love it...amazing. I especially liked this: Their expressions were stony beneath the shadows of their helmets. They knew what was coming. Scenes of terror and death and carnage. ...