Brian

I read it once, hated it. Read it again, hated it more. Read it a third time, and well, hated it even more. I honestly cannot stand stuff like this. ...

Not to be nitpicky or anything, but in "At that time charlotte realized what she was doing," Charlotte should be capitalized. Anyways, these are all good excerpts. I liked the ...

Oh. My. God. My mind is fried... But I find grammatical mistakes! "and screamed and it turned out it was Alex’s mother, I knew she was a demonic aura from ...

I very much like the intent of this poem as it has an appeal to both sides of the political spectrum. I always like to believe that a soldier never ...

Some technical aspects... Either don't capitalize all I's or do; just don't go for a mix. Here I would suggest just going with capitalized all the way since the use ...

Excellent poem, but I think you could gain a lot from switching to present tense throughout. For instance: "reveals the frosty underlayer of forgotten secrets, " sounds a lot better ...

This is a really interesting and enjoyable poem to read. Each line really has no connection to the line before or after, but still flows well and is cohesive as ...

I like this one :D You misspelt Captain, but it's flawless in every other sense. The poem rolls right off the tongue, and the descriptions are vivid and easy to ...

Good flash fiction! But your grammar needs some work; you got a lot of comma splices in here. "Each breath seems to linger at the back of my throat and ...

I thought that this story was pretty interesting. I like your descriptions of the high priestess, and you do a good job of conveying the rebel movement against this lady. ...

I read a lot, and it's very rare that I read as intensely as I did with this one, or that I have a strange tensing senstation in my chest. ...

Sappy and mushy. A parent would love this, lol. Only had a problem with the first paragraph. Seemed rather mean and insulting, but I also don't know anything about you ...

Grammatical corrections are in bold: When a friend tells you a secret, something which they could trust no one else with, you are naturally expected to keep it ; after ...

I'm going to start with the grammar. For poetry, you either use punctuation or you don't (with the exception of apostrophes). You can't choose to use periods, but not commas. ...

I liked it. Reminds me of War of the Worlds, though I know you meant World War II. You got really good descriptions, and there's a good feel to the ...