A quiet attraction
so platonic
not so innocent
uneasiness engulfs me
the knowledge of no mutual feelings
moving on seems to be one of the hardest things
no more than a friend
( that's a bitch)
a slap to my confidence
my comfort
a point for my loneliness
the avoidance irks me
my feelings obviously noticed;
your rejection noted
feelings are like the rain on my parade
avoidance is like the ignorance you gave
providing a sweet seduction you never meant to give
the painful awkwardness is unreal
stop running
maybe this is my fault
feelings ruin everything
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This is a really interesting and enjoyable poem to read. Each line really has no connection to the line before or after, but still flows well and is cohesive as a whole; sort of like Billy Joel's "We Didn't Start The Fire." The last line also adds to the poem rather than detracts, which is usually the case when you try to add a poem's title into the poem itself.