BondGirl007

Lack of punctuation, and capitalization of the first letter of every line are tow things that really bug me when reading poetry, both of which you did here. But that's ...

She removed a silver necklace where it shimmered; a light in the darkness. What does she do with the necklace? Does she give it to the girl? Or does she ...

Well, this wasn't to bad, the subject is a little over done, but it's not the most horrible poem on the face of the earth. But I understand needing to ...

I have two big points with this poem. 1- The Spelling. You had many spelling errors, lack of proper capitalization, and you used & instead of and. Those things irked ...

You picked a very meaningful subject to write about, I've been around a lot of alcoholics, and you portrayed this really well, especially in the last line. She sits and ...

I really loved the first line of this poem, She was a wondrous flower,as I was an ugly weed.She was a gracious lion,as I was a stinging bee. I think ...

Hey Howler, so you picked a pretty cool subject to write a poem on, luck and chance, I like that. The actual execution of the poem, ehh...not so much. You ...

So it was a little rough around the edges, but I think it's pretty good :D. Just a little pet peeve of mine when you write I'd, don't forget the ...

Hey there Tiger, so let me first start out by saying that I've read a lot of poetry in the last few days, and this really sticks out. It's got ...

okay, so it's not the most original work- With "His golden hair", "Oh why did he leave me?" And other such overused things. But, it's alright. Overall it's an okay ...

Hey Kyousuke, quick tip when doing poetry- Try to avoid things that are overused, such as "My shattering heart was bleeding", because it tends to through off your poems. But ...

Hey Skl, I'm going to make this quick, because it's late and I'm tired. So anyway, I enjoyed the rhythm, and rhyme of it, but I couldn't quite grasp the ...

Hey Flit! I thought this piece was excellent. Something about it reminded me a great deal of Shakespeare, and I love it. I have a few little tiny things to ...

Let me first point out that you don't need to capitalize the beginning of every line, it follows the same rules as when writing for stories, capitalize when you start ...

I can dance with the fibbers; Fibbers, like liars? I didn't like how it repeated so much, mostly with the "With its bittersweet chills", and "It pierces my tongue and ...