Bloodlord

Hi, this was an interesting chapter! I'm glad that the Seenu-Shanaya relationship is finally back together for real! It looks like the other review touched up on all the grammar, ...

Hi, Bloodlord here again for a review! Wow... where do you get all these jokes?! This is great! I like how you are starting to build a stronger connection between ...

A funny chapter, as always! You develop the characters' personalities well through the funny dialogue, but more physical description would be pretty helpful. You describe the atmosphere of the restaur

You build momentum, tension, and direction with the action really well, and you make everything real and believable. Just to address the things you mentioned in the beginning: 1) Character ...

You move the story at just the right pace, and this was really fun to read! Since the other review went over the grammatical end, I don't think you need ...

This is hilarious, and again you make the characters likeable and funny. I think you weave humor into chapter perfectly, and dialogue is very natural. However, while I can hear ...

This is a funny continuation of part 1 of ch.1! I like how you establish a different personality for each character - Gallant feels, well, gallant; Vegemite feels like a ...

Hello, Bloodlord here for a review! This was a great chapter, and I forward to reading about the exciting chase to come! Your writing style was smooth and natural, and ...

This was very convincing, and I don't think you're bad at these kinds of scenes at all! You make the Chrys and Shujaa likeable and real, and the readers cannot ...

I just read your previous chapters, and I have to say that your writing style is SO amazing. You make the plot so fluid and natural, the characters are relatable, ...

This was an exciting, satisfying resolution. The action and tension moved at just the right pace, and I don't really have much critique. The only thing I would say is ...

Another exciting chapter! I can’t wait to see how the conflict between Seenu, Susaina, and Shanaya resolves. I think you could amp up Seenu’s anger a little bit more when ...

Hi, Bloodlord here for a review! First reaction: What. The. Heck. This girl is SOO creepy. You conveyed her creepy behavior in such a compelling way, I was cringing the ...

Hi, Bloodlord here for a review! This is an interesting chapter, and I look forward to seeing how these relationships evolve in the coming chapters! You make Seenu a vulnerable ...

This is a fun continuation of Chapter 1! I like how we don't exactly know what Gracie and Jayce's objective(s) is / are yet as they attack. The ending is ...