Hi again! This is a very short chapter so I should have time to cover it before lunch but while this is good for me, this would never be true of an actual reading book so you probably want to try and make this longer. As it's a continuation of the previous scene, there'd be no harm in just having this be part of the previous chapter. I tend to only change chapter when I'm switching mood/ topic/ scene/ perspective or when the previous one is really too long and I think my readers need a chance to put the book down.
Specifics
1. I feel like one of Scarlet's first questions should be how does she do it? If I found out my friend could do something cool, I'd want to try just in case I could too. This has been true of everything from the first time I saw someone manage to put a yo-yo into sleeper mode to even now when someone does a cool trick in excel. No matter how crazy or unmanageable it might seem, our first instinct is to try and do it too. Children don't ask if walking is something only big humans do - they get up on their feet and try. Scarlet would want to know where Ebony was when it happened, whether she felt anything unusual just before the first time she changed etc.
2.
This seems a big jump - what is she basing this assumption off? If it's books she's read then that's fine but you need to tell us that. if I found out one of my friends was able to build a time machine, I wouldn't automatically assume there must be a villain out there with a time machine too.She wandered back down the streets towards her house, thinking about her day. She had so many questions. If there were good magic people, didn't it mean that there were bad magic people as well? How would you know if somebody was magic?
Overall
Lots of magic! I'd like to see Scarlet's emotions more in this chapter as her world has been turned upside down in a few short hours and we don't know if it frightens or excites her that there's magic. We don't fully understand if she's feeling jealous of her friend or thinking of what fun mischief they could get up to so there's a few more hints you could include.
Also didn't Scarlet get detention? I don't know how it works in all schools but in mine, you often had to go see the head of your year at the end of the day/ right after the class you got it and sometimes would be held up a bit. I didn't ever have to but one of my friends was always getting detention and we'd have to wait for her at the gate to say goodbye/ if she was walking with one of us.
But then I know lunch time detentions were a thing too so maybe she got one of those instead? Just be sure to follow up on it. I'm sure Scarlet is used to detentions since she's always late but she should probably still be annoyed by it/ feel like the world is unfair - she doesn't get to be magic and she gets detention!
That's all for now - catch you again soon.
~Heather
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