BlondieMissyAngel

Hey sweetie! GO TEAM YELLOW~ so here's my suggestions I herded the sheep into the pen. is the pen small, big, wooden, metal? discribe it more “I’m done my chores ...

I really enjoyed reading this but I did find it a bit choppy. How did Madison know all that? It was almost as if she had practiced it all. I ...

I enjoyed this chapter alot but I feel as if there is pleanty of room to dive deeper into the conversation and Ashton's feelings and thoughts as this conversation is ...

Hey okay so Love love love! I'm really into the whole identity mystery thing but i think it's sorta like that Cinderella Story movie with Hillary Duff except instead of ...

Hey there =] So to start off i just wanna say that this is a very interesting story so far. You used very good word choices and I think that ...

Hey sweetie, oh my word this is like super awesome! =] I love it cause I can really relate to it. When I was in 7th grade i told my ...

Hey hey hey angel face! I really loved this chapter! In all honesty I DO think it coupld use a little work. Grammer, spelling etc. Minor details that youp got ...

Hey, This was a really emotional story, I could tell through the writing that it's a real life situation and that you went through pain when this was happening. What ...

Chapter One, the True Beginning You can leave this out. We already know this information Felix Windbow was hunting when the tale begins of course he was when the tale ...

hey Nike, looking for his belowed , Hermonie. I think you mean "beloved" He hasn't eaten for hours, because you were working in past tense before this should read, "He ...

Hey there Bickazer! I must say this was great! His arm was broken and a few of his ribs cracked. I think you can use more discriptave words here for ...

Hey there! Ok I gotta say I love this chapter. It's not just a load of random nonsence. I enjoy how you tell it as it is. What she's thinking, ...

Hey Bro! "But then again, if this actually works, you really shouldn't begin a sentance with the word "but" especially a paragraph. I say get rid of it and capitalise ...

Hey there LastPaladin! I'm Missy! ok.... WOW! STUNNING work! I have to say that I love the way this is written, it has been said before that there's always beauty ...

Hey there EternalSleep, First of all, what a funny reason to write a song!! XD Now just a few things... A) what's with all the "..." action happening? if you're ...