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Well, I suck, haha. But my reasoning is the same as Jabs' - I wasn't sure what to say. Sure, your imagery is brilliant and you've trained the English language ...

Hey, rome! Just a quick note beforehand - you might want to do a couple of reviews (so that you get reviews!), and introduce yourself in the welcome area . ...

Hey Rasca! This is all very bloated. I find you're using phrases that really don't need to be there, and bulking it up with adjectives that just don't work. It's ...

Hey! Let's take a look... Before I begin, let me just say that I loved the flow that this seemed to have, and how it seemed random but still sort ...

Hey Bug! Just a quick dialogue not: your grammar's all off in that department, and it was quite distracting as I read it. There's a wonderful little article by Snoink ...

Hey! I see you wrote this a while ago, but I hope you'll still find my comments useful. I love the idea for the poem! The First World War has ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! You might want to go and review some other people's work, too, because then you're more likely to a response. That said, here we go: ...

Heh, I love how warm and friendly this poem is! The trouble is that I thought it was a bit too soft. Don't kill me, but I definitely think this ...

Hey, Spiral! I must say, you're rhyming was rather nice. It wasn't too forced, and it came across as subtle and effective. Inevitable, it didn't distract at all. So well ...

Hey fell! You have some lovely imagery in here! Or at least, I really think it could be. See, imagery, while it can sound fantastic, unless connected to something (can ...

Hey there! I agree with everyone else - to have such an interesting topic watered down so much is a bit of a disappointment. The rhyme scheme really constricts you ...

Hey Howler! Welcome to YWS! This is a lovely start - the stanzas flower well and there were no choppy, awkward moments that completely distracted the reader. So well done. ...

Hey, July! Welcome to YWS. =D This poem had a nice flow to it. The rhyming scheme was soft and didn't feel too forced (with a couple of exceptions - ...

What's this? A new poem? =P Actually, I got the same impression as Conrad - it felt like an 17/1800s Pride and Prejudice-style ball, and all the dialogue made it ...

Give this a title! Anything! Right now! The truth is, even it's something lame and generic, you're more likely to get people reading if there's a title. And it gives ...