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Re: Exhausted
This captures the essence of tiredness and also creates a nice impression of dreaminess. This makes me think about when I'm too tried to get out of bed in the ...
Sep 28, 2013 -
Re: Life is a journey
Ok let me give you a quick rundown on formatting a song. If you are following a pop music structure or anything along that lines, yo should have the following ...
Sep 28, 2013 -
Re: People
Hello there! Here comes a review for review day. When I read this poem I feel.... it is a bit detached. Like it has no connecting idea or theme tying ...
Sep 28, 2013 -
Re: Illusion - Prologue
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is very well written. Your words flow very nicely and build upon each other to create an image. I wan't you to know you have made a great ...
Sep 28, 2013 -
Re: Mallinda Collins
Yes I like this!!! I was scared it was going to be suicidal in which I would have probably stopped reading this, but it turned out very interesting, it captivated ...
Sep 28, 2013 -
Re: No More Apologies
My first review for review day! I like this a ton. Firstly you need to check up your punctuation as you seem to have forgotten it in some places, but ...
Sep 28, 2013 -
Re: Mayday Chapter 1
Reviewy-view-view~ From her rucksack she pulls a small blanket, the girl also removes a small canteen of water and a bag of what seems to be food. I think this ...
Sep 24, 2013 -
Re: Behavior Problems (The Bad Child Ep. 1)
I like this, its well written and easy to read because of how well it flows. One thing I feel is that you didn't capture the mothers horrified and appalled ...
Sep 20, 2013 -
Re: Lamb of God.
Please do not get upset over this, but I am going to be blunt. I read this poem a while ago, and was going to review- but since you were ...
Sep 20, 2013 -
Re: a sickle in the dust
Hey there Persy, you are one of my favourite poets on this site, and I didn't realize you wrote short stories too up until now. As far as a review ...
Sep 19, 2013 -
Re: 10 Extremely Helpful Tips to Surviving (Most of) High School
Good job! If only you posted this sooner. I have an exam tomorrow and I have been procrastination all week. Hell I even cleaned my room. MY ROOM; I couldn't ...
Sep 17, 2013 -
Re: Hunters Mark
It had been five minutes. F ive minutes wasted walking around in circles, doing nothing. I had been searching for a load of bs ???what? . And I kept finding ...
Sep 17, 2013 -
Re: The Head.
You know what goes well with romance? Blood Gore And creepiness. I love it. Hmm I'm trying to find something to review but its hard because you have done everything ...
Sep 16, 2013 -
Re: Stalking- sometimes it's good...
Yo. This is my perspective and I do not know your intentions and motives in writing this. First of all I felt it was really really random. At first it ...
Sep 16, 2013 -
Re: Rumored Friends
Hello there! Nice little poem you have here. Lets give you a review. First things first, when I read this line: Casts the flourishing shadow of It feel very out ...
Sep 14, 2013
