BigBadBear

Hey, Kyte. What's up? "Hello? O-o ? Is anybody there-ere-ere?" That reminds me of the eyes we use in the chat. hehe. O.o It was a really good start, but ...

Hey, SCL! What's up? I all alone and lost in life I = I'm :) I liked this first stanza. It's great. Yeah... :P I can’t stand it No more! ...

[s]Dude. Seriously. I hope you don't think that this is a poem. This is... horrible. Sorry dude. -Jared [/s] EDIT: Yeah, sorry guys. I guess I was just... not very ...

Great story! I love it, but Prince Charming is a little vulgar though. But then, he's what makes the story funny. I like this version of Snow White better than ...

Hey, Slinds! What's up? Ok, I'm gonna be honest. None of the last lines of any stanza really worked for me. You seem to be forcing all of your rhymes, ...

Hey, Mark! Why aren't you going to be posting any more after this? This is an incredible story... Well, I've been thinking and I've decided that listing a bunch of ...

Hey! I'm Jared, and I hope that you find this critique helpful! The length isn't too terribly long... “Yes it is,” replied the cat delightedly, “That little girl you seen ...

*stares in awe* *drools a little, perhaps* Wow. I would never have expected something like this... this was truely a masterpiece! Hehe! Ok... I can't really give you any grammar ...

Huh. Interesting. XD Um... I'm really terrible at poetry... but one thing that this lacks is rythm. I spelt that wrong, huh? Anywho, it just... reads like a run-on sentence, ...

Haha. A writer's block poem... hehe Edits are in bold There is a little monster that creeps into your mind. It sits upon a block that reads, “I take my ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm Jared, I'll be you're critiquer for today. Well, I'll give you a couple things that you did excellently and some things that you really have ...

Hey there! Well, this was an okay poem. There are a couple of things that you lack, though. This is basically a prose written in a poem format. No. You ...

Hey! I loved the Harry Potter series, so let's begin! He wondered if the Sorting Hat would take his opinion into account. 'Not Slytherin, not Slytherin,' he told himself. WWWWWAAAAYYY ...

Hya! Why has no one reviewed this? It's such a nice story... O.o We usually ran careful, fast, and vicious but today she was running carefree and excited. That whole ...

Hey! This was a good start! But still... raptors? C'mon! T-Rex's are soooooo much cooler! Anyway, my personal life to the side: It was very intriguing. I like the whole ...