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Re: wind swept
Hey! I like the simplicity of this poem. A few things though: In your poem, "i" needs to be capitalized. It always should be. the wind sept cold over my ...
Jul 15, 2011 -
Re: Lies.
Hey again! :D This was really great. I loved it. Found so much truth behind the words too...which is ironic since the poem is titled lies...but it describes it all ...
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: Crossfire
Sorry i took so long to get to this. Wow! I really really really liked this! This piece does describe EXACTLY how I feel. When i was younger, I was ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: Coward
This was great! I thought I'd look it over since you commented on my piece- I Can't Win. You've strongly captured the ways of a coward for sure.. My favorite ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: The Girl In The Cornor{intro}
I need a little bit more here to keep hooked. It was great idea behind it so far..but you need more. A few suggestions: Rain, a 13 year old girl, ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: More Shorter Stories
I somewhat agree with the person above me. I like the way you end the stories, quick, and surprising, leaving with many questions. But he truth is, they don't have ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Dreams that Change the World
This piece...was great. Amazing. I liked this very much! One thing that is preferable to the reader is spaces between each paragraph. Otherwise, it just looks like a big jumble ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Ugly
This was very insightful. I liked it a lot, great job. I have one thing I'd like to point out though. Everyone said she was skinny as (a) stick I ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: Conflict Between a Writer and His Characters
XD And I thought I was the only one who talked to my characters! I like this piece a lot. Sounds exactly like me when I'm stuck on a beginning ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Far Away and Long Ago
First things first....I loved this :) It was very cute (too me) and just a great poem. I know you said you wanted help with punctuation...but I have no clue ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Kiss me in the rain, baby.
I loved this! Completely! Omg it was amazing :) This is it. He's going to do it. She thought. This is it. I'm going to do it. Jake thought, sinking ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: School Assignment (no title)
This piece was good :)The title threw me off for sure ahaha! But it was great! The grammar/spelling mistakes i saw were already pointed out by the person above, so ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Im not sure where this came from me.
Okay here it is- This piece was good. I liked the idea behind it. Could relate well, which is why I take such a liking to it. The emotion in ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: The Person In The Mirror
Great poem. Maybe if you gave a little more on why he person feels cold and dark? Not necessary, but it would give the reader more of a background. Either ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: Poor little girl
I loved this. Really did :) Such a simple poem, but holds so much emotion. The final two lines just wrapped it all up. A great finish to a great ...
Jun 28, 2011