BenFranks

Hey there! What I like about this piece of poetry is the chosen vocabulary and the effect of it. I think you're also structured it very well. My biggest problem ...

Hey there, Welcome to YWS. Firstly, I enjoyed the originality of your poem and the images were okay - always rooms for improvement - but 'least they delivered some effect. ...

Welcome to YWS! I'm Ben, nice to meet you. I enjoyed the difference of this poem, but you need to avoid ALL chatpeak and punctuate a lot better. Vary sentence ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy it here! Anyway, I found this was truly original with bags of effect and imagery from start to end. Close your ...

Hey there! This writing is well-structured if you're nine years old . The biggest problem I have with this is your naivity. This means you haven't really covered all arguments. ...

Hey there! This was a fun-read. I like fun-reads :) Nice. An improvement? Er, write a little more so we can succumb to more effect, that'll be fab! Sorry about ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! Unfortunately, I disagree with the above, but hey. Okay, in poetry I think grammar's extremely important because it creates fluency as well as tone. I'm ...

This was okay, but its hard to make such a poem vary to every audience unless you give it that extra punch of effect. Personally I think you're lacking it ...

Okay. My favourite thing about your poem is the start, it's well structured, has a nice fluency to sollow and I like the choice of words. It's when you get ...

Okay, Hi there! Good start no? XD Anyway, the poem! My first suggestion is to get rid of these "..." they're heart breakers for fluency. If you want someone to ...

Hey there! Okay, my favourite and most enjoyable thing about this poem was the structure. I love how you've kept the lines short. It creates a kind of unique pace ...

--> Hello again. Okay I prefer this one to your otherone because I can feel some vague emotion trailing through but once again you lack the effect. Its badly written ...

Hey there Percy, Let's start with a couple of punctuation and type errors to improve the fluency of the read: I will survive. I will surv i ve through these ...

Hello lildeh! The length of this poem is just right in my opinion. I think there's a nitpick with the tone of it, however. This is opinion based so it ...

Hey there! To start: Thanks for the good read! Its very original, so well done! I can't nitpick this because I was drawn in by it. Your poetry is so ...