BeautifulDoom

Thanks guys! :D I edited what you suggested, and I really do feel that it makes the Prologue better written, so thank you so much for your help. :] I ...

Whoah, that is really weird. My name is Erin! Freakkkky :D Thanks everyone!

Whoah, this is AWESOME. Update soon please! :D PM me when you do? Thanks!

Thank you everyone! :D Wow, all your suggestions are so helpful, I don't know where to begin. :] Julie- Aw, thanks! Your post was very sweet. I'm about to write ...

Thanks Zib! :] Ohhh, I forgot that I already wrote that she opened the door. Thanks for your feedback, I'm actually about to write Chapter Three right now. I'll message ...

Thank you! :] Oops, I actually just realized that I accidentally put "in" in front of "insane". My bad! But yeah, I'm having a lot of fun writing this story ...

Aww, thank you! Your feedback means a lot to me. And the reason she really hates Patrick is because he's exactly the type of mean, conceited asshole that she never ...

I love it! This is really well-written, but kind of depressing. I suggest you lighten it up a bit, but it's totally up to you. You have really good description, ...

This is perfect in every way, it's beautiful.

Aw, thank you! :] I will have Chapter Two up by tomorrow.

Thanks ballerina! I'll have chapter four up by tomorrow! :]

BondGirl007- I definitely see what you're saying about slowing down character development. In the next few chapters, though, you get to know my main character a lot better. Her thoughts, ...

Thank you guys! :D And sure, snickerdooly. I'll PM you when it's done!

Thanks, Antigone! I really appreciate your tips. I'll definitely consider them when writing Chapter Four :] Also, thank you Ballerina13! I liked your comment. Btw, I already posted Chapters Two ...

This poem is so cute! It flows perfectly. I like how it concentrates on both breakfast and the kids. Great job!