BarrettBenedict

The cherry blossoms did have a meaning, ccmuffin. If you would have read the stanza before it, and the last two lines you might have glimpsed that meaning. The cherry ...

Stanzas have been added. Now please, anyone, tell me your critiques on the ideas of the pome, instead of the grammar and structure. Although, those comments can often times be ...

Chocolatechipmuffin: that image you got was quite correct. Also I'd like to thank you for pointing out that small grammatical error. I'd hate for my peers to think of me ...

A screaming ideal to me would be that purpose men tend to have and fight for, and to have that smothered under incessant apathy is to mean just what it ...

Well, the beginning can be changed. It's a shame you didn't read through more of the story, and give me a fuller critique, because even if I improved upon the ...

It is meant to be "God, you're beautiful".

Wow, thanks Fand. I agree with just about every change you've suggested here, except for the removal of the word magically towards the end. The reason I can't remove that ...

Wow, this is simply amazing.

I think TimJim gave you just about everything you need. You have a good sense for words, you just need to work on how you utilize them. Overall this was ...

Thank you backgroundbob. Your comments are definitely flattering seeing as how you yourself are an exceptional writer and one who's opinions I can trust.

Hey there, thanks for all your comments. I would like to say to writingluver that the use of comfy chair in this poem was quite intentional. It's there to signify ...

Bleet is the sound a sheep makes.

That last line is just wholly inappropriate and hilarious, and that is it's main function in this poem.

Thank you Poor_Imp, for nailing my intentions right on the head.

Wow, that is possibly the most helpful comment I have ever seen. I have nothing to add, aside from good start.