As the man studied
the crimson Rorschach test
left on his bathroom wall,
he decided that it reminded him
of a butterfly in a frog's mouth,
or maybe of cat food,
if cats ate brain matter.
"Happy Anniversary."
he whispered to a memory.
He smiled,
and kissed her almost forehead.
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Thank you backgroundbob. Your comments are definitely flattering seeing as how you yourself are an exceptional writer and one who's opinions I can trust.
Well that's bloody creepy, in a very literal sense XD
Literary, too: it certainly strikes the tone you're going for, right on the head. Large and lasting kudos.
Only thought (for now), I think "brain matter" needs to condense to two syllables to make the flow work right. That's about it.
Yeah, neat