Hi Benny ^^ Shina here ;P And I'll be your reviewer this evening.
I'm not going to get into all the technical stuff because I think Fand covered it, so I'll just get into the overall idea:
This is definitely a great example of showing and not telling, something hard to do. The way you tell this story is so casual, yet there is a story between the lines, weaving their way together like the tapestry in your poem. The way you described a tapestry was very fascinating and shined a new light on it for me. I can't say much about anything else xD I'm still awed by how much it relates to my novel and how much it's inspired me. I have to go write that prophecy! With this as my inspiration, I've got a jumpstart!
Good Luck and Keep Writing
-Shina
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